I re-read my baseball post

I re-read my baseball post from Sunday, and I’m not completely thrilled with it. The story doesn’t fully capture what I was feeling and observed at the time. The last paragraph is horrible and doesn’t make any sense. I left my seat in the bleachers with a definite impression, and the story doesn’t communicate that to the reader at all. Instead of taking it down or just leaving it the way it is, I’m going to make a creative writing exercise out of it. Every week or so, I’ll revisit the story and write a new version of it. The hope is that I will eventually arrive at a version of the story that gives you a sense of the feeling I had that day…and perhaps learn a little about writing in the process.